Drabble/Lyrics: (Just for) Tonight

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Author/Artist: huldrejenta
Title: /Just for) Tonight
Rating & Warnings: PG
Word Count: 150
Prompt: #3, Almost
Summary: It's New Year's Eve. A young woman and an older man find themselves drawn towards each other
Notes: This was written as a song with a specific melody in mind (an old, nordic, melancholy waltz), and I'm not certain how much sense this makes standing alone. Maybe I ought to make a podfic where I sing it, haha :) The lyrics are somewhat inspired by the original lyrics.
Un-beta'd, so please excuse any odd choice of words or Norwenglish phrases :)

Happy New Year, everyone!


The party has started and everyone's here
Laughter and music they flow through the air
A few guests are dancing, waltzing with grace
Among them a woman with a smile on her face

She's colourful, eager, whirls and then whirls some more
Her dragon hide boots hardly come near the floor
Dancing beside her is a shabby, grey man
They look at each other, and he gives her his hand

You foolish, old man, now your thoughts have run wild
This dream in your arms is no more than a child
She's pure and she's whole - all the things you can't be
- But she leans a bit closer and smiles - "Dance with me!"

His hands meet her waist and his heart beats too fast
He almost convinces himself this can last
Yes, he might be old, but the moon is brand new
Just for tonight, he'll pretend this is true

Comments

[starfishstar]

! Aw! This actually gave me little shivers of happiness. I can't even say precisely why, just something about the mood it evokes.

I'd love to be able to put it to its melody in my mind...any chance you could link to somewhere where we can hear a recording of the original melody?

Anyway, even without music, it's lovely! I had no idea what to expect when you mentioned you were writing lyrics, but this is delightful.

[mollywheezy.livejournal.com]

I LOVED this! Very fun and meaningful poem! :)

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much ♥
I'm really pleased that you like it!

I can have a look once I get back home and see what I can find :)

[arctic-comet.livejournal.com]

This is lovely :) It totally makes sense even without the melody.

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm so glad you think so :)
I have the melody in my head when I look at it now, so I wasn't sure how it would read on its own.

[gilpin25.livejournal.com]

I can see that next event we'll have to introduce the singing section! ;)

What a lovely idea. I can imagine singing this in my head - it's probably a long way away from the real melody, lol - and am impressed how much characterisation (and Remus angst!) you've got in there. My favourite is the last verse but they're all delightful.

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm really glad that this worked for you :)

Ah yes, no R/T New Year's Eve dancing without some Remus angst, I'm afraid. At least not in this era ;)

I'm all for a singing section in our next event :)

[shimotsuki.livejournal.com]

This is just beautiful -- and so very them, between Tonks's joy and Remus's self-doubt, heh.

This says so much in just a few lines -- I love the third stanza a lot, but my very favorite lines are probably these:

Yes, he might be old, but the moon is brand new
Just for tonight, he'll pretend this is true

*sniff*...

[huldrejenta.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed this :)
I tried to let their characters shine through even though it's short, so I'm happy you felt that way!